I've added some more sounds and eliminated clock noises. Does this at all work? I originally had steps going through the whole thing but then I thought I liked how the bits of audio played off of each other content wise, which was kind of lost by shifting focus in that way. And it's still 5 minutes long, help!! I've made a transcript and that allowed me to cut some stuff out but now I'm lost!
EDIT: Is the lady calling late at night story understandable? I just played it for my family and my sister said it confused her.