Monday, March 11, 2013

Paula Draft 2 (but totally different)

So the Psychic has up until now not worked out. The one at Crazy Wisdom said no to being recorded and was only a tarot card reader so we didn't think that was worth it. It's still possible that at one point or another Jess and I can try going to another, but I've been working on this as a sort of plan B. It's hugely long right now, but the idea is that it's the narration of a night through some interesting/somewhat creepy stories. I'm not entirely sure where I want to go from here, wether it be shortening this version a lot, or trying to mix the stories together somehow.

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  1. I really enjoyed this draft! If the psychic doesn't end up working out (or even if it does) this is a really successful idea. It captured my attention all the way through, and it was interesting to hear the different voices sharing their creepy stories. One thing that was a little distracting was the first speaker -- I felt that there was no room to let what he was saying set in, it was a constant stream of voice and it became hard to grasp everything he was saying. Maybe allow more pauses in between the key statements he says? I do also think that a bit of each story could be cut (to help reduce the length). Other then that great draft! :)

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