Hannah: Black and White and On My Patio Final

Hey team, I know this is supposed to be a final but I am really not considering it that because I still think it needs a lot of work. I can't seem to get the story to fit in three minutes and as it is right now it feels rushed. Do you think there are parts that could be taken out to give the rest more breathing room or no? I also thought about adding sound but as it stands I don't even think there is room for it? I am at a loss. Love to hear what you all think. Hannah