Final Project: The Bittersweet Diet (or something...)

So this is my "appetite" inspired piece. I'm experimenting heavily with story structure here so I'd like to know if it works at all. I'm looking for a casette player so I can actually record how it would sound to rewind this stuff because I don't think it sounds very realistic. That said, does the structure make sense? And more importantly, does it leave you puzzling until it is resolved at the end or am I just hoping it does that?